The graph below shows the spending of UK residents on visits abroad between 1993 and 2013

The graph below shows the spending of UK residents on visits abroad between 1993 and 2013
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the spending of UK residents on visits abroad between 1993 and 2013
The line graph depicts the UK citizen’s expenditure on four activity categories when
traveling
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overseas over a span of 20
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, from 1993. At a glance, it is noticeable that all of the spending on distinct types experienced a rise, but the type of each rising is different in regard to the given
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. In terms of the highest spending, the amount of money which
spent
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was spent
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on holiday stood at precisely £9
billion
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in
initial
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year
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and reached a peak at about £25
billion
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in 2008. It
then
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fluctuated in the next 5
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and stopped
in
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just under £24
billion
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. In regard to the three lowest expenditures, in
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the initial
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initial
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the initial
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year
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, about £2
billion
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was spent on business but
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number grew slightly by approximately £2
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in 2003
,
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and
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dropped marginally to about £5
billion
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at the end
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of the period.
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, UK people who visited their friends or relatives spent approximately £2
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in
first
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year
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,
climbed
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which climbed
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gradually and stood at
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£5
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in 2013.
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with miscellaneous activities, which started at just under £2
billion
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in 1993 and fluctuated in the following
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.
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number
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stabilized until
last
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year
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, billion, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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