News plays an important part of most people’s lives. Why is news so important to people? Why is so much news dedicated to bad news? Should the news focus on good news instead?
The
news
could be considered to be an essential fixture and part of a person's everyday routine. For some, watching the news
is just as important to them as having their dinner every day at the same time. For others, the news
is the most reliable and accurate source of information, not only in a local sense but also
on a global scale.
As I previously stated the news
can play a significant role in people
's lives. Firstly
, watching or reading the news
helps you stay up to date
and relevant with all the current events that Add a hyphen
up-to-date
maybe
taking place in your local environment. Correct your spelling
may be
In addition
to this
, the news
also
reports on any major incidences or trials that could be occurring in other parts of the world. This
could be particularly useful for not only gaining a deeper understanding of what is happening across the planet,
but Remove the comma
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also
as way
of keeping updated with a precarious situation that Add an article
a way
maybe
arising in a country where your family resides.
It could be argued that the vast majority of Correct your spelling
may be
news
is geared towards the bad rather than the good. I believe this
is the case because, in this
way, society and people
in general
will be more acutely aware of any potential threats or dangers that are taking place around them. Add the comma(s)
, in general,
For instance
, extreme weather warnings of floods or snow could be distressing or alarming to a family, but, this
caution has the ability to save someone’s life. Furthermore
, most news
is usually bad as this
is a realistic portrayal of what is happening around the world.
Although
it could be said that the news
should comment on the good rather than the bad, this
could perhaps be extremely unrealistic. The news
is primarily a source of factual information; so, if it was centered
on positive findings Change the spelling
centred
then
a lot of the scary and true life threatening
circumstances would not be documented. Add a hyphen
life-threatening
This
means, that many people
would have a sugar coated
and untrue version of reality.
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sugar-coated
To conclude
, I believe that the news
is important to people
as it keeps you up to date with current affairs and increases your general knowledge. I am also
of the belief that bad news
is more focused on, as this
is an accurate source of reality.Submitted by abeera2012 on
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a clear logical structure by organizing it into paragraphs with clear topic sentences that introduce the focus of each paragraph. Each paragraph should develop a single main idea related to the overall topic.
Coherence and Cohesion
Include an introduction and conclusion that clearly state your perspective on the topic and summarize the main points discussed in the essay, respectively. Both elements are present in your essay, but they could be more explicitly tied to the key questions.
Coherence and Cohesion
Support the main points with specific examples or explanations to strengthen your argument and make your essay more persuasive. You have provided some general statements, but more detailed examples would help to illustrate your points more convincingly.
Task Achievement
Make sure to fully address all parts of the task in a balanced way. Present clear and comprehensive ideas that directly respond to each question posed in the prompt. You have addressed the importance of news and the prevalence of bad news, but could further elaborate on whether the news should focus on good news instead.
Task Achievement
Always conclude with a strong statement that encapsulates your viewpoint on the topic, making your stance clear to the reader. While your conclusion is present, it could further highlight the nuances of the discussion by reflecting on the contrast between 'bad' and 'good' news.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example