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The maps below show recent changes in town of Kimsvile. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show recent changes in town of Kimsvile. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pictures illustrate the changes
on
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 Kimsvile town between 2022 and
present
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the present
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 situation.
Overall
, the comparison of the maps reveals that there were no significant changes regarding the
city
 layout,
however
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however,
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 some places
has
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have
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 changed and
build
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are built
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 for commercial and public
facilites
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facilities
.
Moreover
, two forest has been replaced with new buildings. In terms of
the
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apply
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Kimsvile town prior to the development,
city
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the city
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center
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centre
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 was
the
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apply
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located in the
central
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centre
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 of the
city
. There were four forests which placed in each corner of the
city
. To the north of the
city
 centre, located a shopping area
while
 the opposite to it lie an old cinema.
Then
 the factory was situated in the east of the Kemsvile
city
. Regarding the changes in
the
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Kemsvile town, two
forest
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forests
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in
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on
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 both corner on the west side of the
city
,
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 has been replaced with
apartements
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apartments
 and
football
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a football
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 stadium. Between those
place
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places
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,
new
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a new
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 train station
also
build
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builds
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 to the west of the
city
 centre.
In addition
,
software
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the software
a software
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 company has been constructed at the expense of
factory
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a factory
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 and
old
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the old
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 cinema has been converted
to
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into
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pub
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a pub
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.
Lastly
, the remaining
area
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areas
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such
 as
shopping
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the shopping
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 area,
city
 centre and two
forest
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forests
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left
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apply
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are unchanged.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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