You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter:college •say why he/she would not enjoy going to college •explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her •suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

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Dear Emre. Hi Emre,how are you? I hope you doing very well. I am writing to let you know that,
definetely
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advice
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to
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get
a
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work.In my opinion,you should
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having new job because our country
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more expensive and the college has
bad
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education.You need a lot of
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.I hope you will consider my idea positively immediately. Let me explain my
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universities
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without education and materials and many people
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universities
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to high school.
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some
school
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closed
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it has
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money
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.
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Adnan Menderes
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demolished
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by
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. I do not want to go to
unıversity
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university
you
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, in my country is very expensive and everyone
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a
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money
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after you
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become a new officer
then
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you can
win
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. you believe that really very
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difficult
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money
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Thank you for
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with love, Ahmet
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coherence cohesion
Ensure clear paragraphing with each paragraph containing a central idea.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of cohesive devices to better link ideas and create a flowing narrative.
coherence cohesion
The letter should have a clear opening and closing, but more polite beginnings and endings would be appropriate.
task achievement
Address all parts of the prompt in detail, providing specific reasons and examples to support points.
task achievement
Ensure use of an appropriate tone, which should be friendly and considerate, matching a letter to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical nature
  • real-world experience
  • practical experience
  • professional network
  • financial independence
  • dynamic
  • on-the-job learning
  • creative industries
  • customer service
  • sectors
  • suitable
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