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The graph below shows the spending of UK residents on visits abroad between 1993 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the spending of UK residents on visits abroad between 1993 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the four types of Britain citizens’ expenditures
while
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 travelling to other countries over a ten-year
period
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. The measurement is in
billion
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 pounds. In general, the four spending categories had increased during the timeline. Apparently, holidays were the most favourite activities overseas,
due to
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 the expenses.
Initially
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, the UK natives’ biggest allocation of funds was holidays, which started at 9
billion
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 in 1993 and experienced a considerable surge, up to approximately 25
billion
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 in 2008. Unfortunately, it plummeted to about 3
billion
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 in 2009. Afterwards, the figure remained stable at around 22
billion
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 within a 4-year
period
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 and reached almost 24
billion
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 in 2013. The other three categories’ numbers were down below the holiday by close to 6
billion
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. Business, as the
scond-highest
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second-highest
 category at nearly 3
billion
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 in 1993, experienced
fluctuating
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 increase during the
period
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 and reached almost 5
billion
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 in 2013. Another British
residents’
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 expense when travelling abroad was visiting friends and their relatives. The figure experienced an upward trend during the
period
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 and remained stable for the
last
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 5 years with around 5
billion
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.
In addition
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, miscellaneous spending represented the lowest figure, fluctuating around 2
billion
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 throughout the ten-year
period
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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