The diagram below shows how salt is removed from sea water to make it drinkable.
The given flow charts
illustrates
the series of steps involved in the process of distillation of Change the verb form
illustrate
sea
water
tp
be drinking Correct your spelling
to
water
.
Overall
the whole procedure for filtering the sea
water
entails of
four steps, starting with Change preposition
apply
take
up the saltwater Wrong verb form
taking
pass
the Wrong verb form
passing
pipe
to the several treatment process
. Change to a plural noun
processes
Moreover
, there are three filter
tank
, one storage and eight Fix the agreement mistake
tanks
pipe
for Change to a plural noun
pipes
flow
Correct article usage
the flow
the
Change preposition
of the
water
.
Firstly
, the water
streamed directly from the sea
to the pre-treatment filter
and there is another pipe
on the bottom for filter
Correct article usage
the filter
backwash
the Fix the infinitive
to backwash
water
then
Correct word choice
and then
returned
the Wrong verb form
return
water
to the sea
. Secondly
, the water
run
to the second Wrong verb form
runs
filter
stages
where the Fix the agreement mistake
stage
water
force though
Correct your spelling
through
membrane
with high Correct article usage
the membrane
presure
, on Correct your spelling
pressure
this
stage only water
molecule
Fix the agreement mistake
molecules
that
can pass the membrane, Correct pronoun usage
apply
while
the impurities and salt are sending
back to the bottom Wrong verb form
sent
pipe
for returned to sea
again.
Correct article usage
the sea
Thirdly
, water
flow to the last
treatment, post-treatment with adding the water
with lime, chlorine and flouride
to make the Correct your spelling
fluoride
water
more
clearer. Change the word
apply
Lastly
, the drinkable water
are
Change the verb form
is
store
in the Wrong verb form
stored
water
storage and this
part connected
Add a missing verb
is connected
with
Change preposition
to
pipe
Correct article usage
a pipe
for
integrate the Change preposition
to
water
to
the Change preposition
into
water
supply system.Submitted by 2024successielts on
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sea, water, pipe, filter with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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