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Before and after construction of some tourist facilities

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provide
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 maps outlined an unnamed
island
 , before and after the development of various facilities for tourism.
In
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overall
 , the total distance of the
island
 is about 100 meters . The given maps
illustrates
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 that the
island
 has only trees and a beach before the construction of several services for tourist. After construction , the infrastructure of
island
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the island
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 is very easy to access for the tourists . The
island
 has a pier which is used to park the boats there is a reception straight to the
pie
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pier
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 and it is located in the
center
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centre
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 of
island
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the island
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 . Around the reception , a large number of
accomodation
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accommodation
accommodations
 are available for the travellers who
has
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 a
restaurent
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restaurant
 for serving meals to the tourists . The
island
also
offer
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 swimming in the beach areas which attracts more people. The
Island
also
 constructed the vehicle track for travellers from
pier
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the pier
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 to reception and to
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the Restaurent
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Restaurent
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restaurant
.
moreover
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moreover,
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 it has
footpath
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a footpath
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 from all
accomodation
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accommodation
 to
beach
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the beach
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.
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