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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
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This
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 bar chart presents data depicting the expenditure patterns of families in a particular country from 1968 to 2018. It is evident from the chart that, in 2018, families allocated over 10% of their weekly income to various categories.
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 the presented information, in 1968, food expenditure constituted 35% of the weekly income.
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 figure significantly decreased by about 18%, reaching 17% in 2018.
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, housing witnessed a noteworthy increase from 10% in 1968 to 18% in 2018. Transport and leisure expenditures experienced a dramatic surge from 8% to 14%, and 9% to 22%, respectively. Concerning the remaining categories (fuel and power, clothing, housing, and personal goods), they exhibit a similar consumption pattern, accounting for about 5% to 7%, averaging weekly spending by families' income from 1968 to 2018. To summarize, it can be inferred that, historically, people tended to allocate their funds to essential needs like food and housing.
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, in recent decades, there has been a shift towards spending on luxury items.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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