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The maps below show changes in the Spanish city of Castellon in recent times. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show changes in the Spanish city of Castellon in recent times. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate some changes to the town of Castellon from 2000 until now. In general,
this
 can be easily seen from the town as a big revolution. A lot more facilities were constructed in that period. But the most noticeable thing is the construction in the middle, between the university and the city centre. As can be seen from the maps, most buildings were replaced and erected.
In
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 the left of both maps, we can see there’s a new hall of residence was built, under it there used to
have
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 a train station now replaced by a police station. For the old market replacement , we have a new shop which
located
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 next to the pedestrian road, used to be a road for cars.
Also
, a new cinema with bars and clubs
were
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 located near the old port
in
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 the bottom. Turning to the other feature, we can see a new train station was set up to connect the university with the city centre which
now
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 integrated with
bike
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 rental scheme.
In
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 the right, people had chopped down trees for a new shopping centre and below, a new airport
are
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 under construction and
maybe will
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 be introduced
for
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months later.
Finally
, a new covered market was added.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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