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The charts give information about two genres of TV programmes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia.

The charts give information about two genres of TV programmes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia.
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The bar charts compare and contrast data on
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the pecentage
show examples
pecentage
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percentage
 of
men
 and
women
 and four different
age
 groups
watch
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watching
show examples
reality
 shows and
game
 shows.
Overall
,
while
 the
women
 prefer to watch more
reality
 shows than
game
 shows, the
men
 have
opposite
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the opposite
show examples
 tendency.
Moreover
,
people
are
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apply
show examples
above the
age
 of 45 have the highest ratio
amongst
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among
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 these four groups. The percentage of nearly 35% of
men
 opt to watch
reality
 shows,
nonetheless
,
women
's preference of watching it is at approximately 70%.
In addition
,
watching
Rephrase
when watching
show examples
game
 programmes ratio of
men
 and
women
are
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is
show examples
 close to each other respectively just above 60% and just below 60%. The
age
 of 16-24
people
 have almost the same percentage of watching these two genres of TV programmes with almost 50%.
Furthermore
, individuals who are
range
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a range
show examples
 of 25-34
age
 have a trend of
follow
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following
show examples
reality
 shows rather than
game
 shows with 60%. 35-44 and 45+
people
 who prefer
reality
 shows
ratio
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a ratio
show examples
that is
 about 70%
are
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apply
show examples
the
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apply
show examples
similar,
however
, the percentage of
game
 shows for
age
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the age
an age
show examples
 of 35-44
people
 is 40%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, age, reality, game, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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