The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
The maps below show the changes in a public
park
when it was first opened in the year 1920
as well as
the same
park
today.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that a number of facilities
has
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been added to the infrastructure of Garange
Park
on Arnold Avenue
such
as a children's play area, an amphitheatre for concerts and other.
According to
the given diagram, in 1920, there was a fountain in the centre of a community
park
,
while
in the coming days rose garden will take the place of a fountain
along with
the service of seats.
Moreover
, the entrance will run
from
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the same direction.
Furthermore
, in the corner of the North side, there was a pond for water plants which will shift into the facility of a playground for children.
Also
, a cafe will be opened in the community
park
. Moving
further
, the stage for musicians should be replaced with an amphitheatre for concerts. Meanwhile, a water feature will be constructed in the area of the glasshouse in the coming days.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 91%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • developments
  • modifications
  • landscaping
  • recreational needs
  • enhance
  • functionality
  • vegetation
  • environmental conservation
  • infrastructure improvements
  • community involvement
  • diverse groups
  • outdoor activities
  • environmental stewardship
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