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The diagram shows the relationship between a numbers of different languages. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram illustrates the relationship between some distinct languages of the
English
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language
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 family.
Overall
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, the languages are divided into different
groups
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 based on their locations with the British
language
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 as the larger group. First of all, the
English
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language
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 splits into
two
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 different branches - the American
English
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 branch and the British
English
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 branch. After that, the American
English
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language
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continues
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continued
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 to
divide
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be divided
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 into
two
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 major
groups
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, located in
two
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 countries of North America. The United States of America
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 consists of six individual
groups
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while
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 Canada has
two
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groups
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.
In contrast
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, the British
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 branch consists of six different
groups
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, three times larger than the American
English
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. The number of these
groups
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’ members
range
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ranges
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 between
two
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 to five with Australasia, West Indies, and Far East as the
groups
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 with the least number of members
while
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 that of Indian-Pakistan is the biggest.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words english, language, groups, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "divided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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