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byThe charts below compare five different countries, showing the electricity used (measured in megawatts or mw) in a typical hospital during one week, and also the number of emergency medical calls made by local residents during the same week. The last chart shows the average time (in minutes) spent on assessing emergency cases by hospital medical staff before the patients are treated. Chart 1 (below): Electricity used (megawatts or mw) in a typical hospital Chart 2 (below): Number of emergency medical calls made by local residents chart 3: average time (in minutes) spend on assessing emergency cases by hospital medical staff before treatment.

byThe charts below compare five different countries, showing the electricity used (measured in megawatts or mw) in a typical hospital during one week, and also the number of emergency medical calls made by local residents during the same week. The last chart shows the average time (in minutes) spent on assessing emergency cases by hospital medical staff before the patients are treated. Chart 1 (below): Electricity used (megawatts or mw) in a typical hospital Chart 2 (below): Number of emergency medical calls made by local residents chart 3: average time (in minutes) spend on assessing emergency cases by hospital medical staff before treatment.
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The provided graphs demonstrate the differences in the
mount
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amount
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 of electricity that
used
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is used
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 in a certain hospital in five different countries.
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, the given charts describe the figures for urgent medical calls that made by citizens,
as well as
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, the average
minutes
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that
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allocated to determine
emergency
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 situations before treating a patient.
According to
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 the provided data, there were five countries: France, Canada, Japan, Russia, and Argentina.
Overall
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, after a thorough analysis of the given charts, it can be plainly viewed that
while
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Franch
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French
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 medical
institution
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 came in the
first
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 place as the most commonly consumed hospital of
the
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electricity power, Argentinian
hospital
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hospitals
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 came
last
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.
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 to that Canada came
first
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 in the number of
emergency
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 calls in that
week
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. In the beginning, regarding the
first
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 chart, the amount of electrical power
that
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used by the France hospital was
in
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an
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the
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average of 32 megawatts throughout the
week
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, followed by
Canadian
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the Canadian
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 one which came second and the average was between 26-38
mw
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MW
.
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, we can clearly witness that the consumption level of electrical energy in Argentina was significantly low with only around 6-9 megawatts.
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, moving to the second graph,
whereas
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 the quantity of
the
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emergency
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 medical calls in Canada experienced a progressive increase to reach almost 170 calls on Sunday, the proportion of urgent calls in Argentina went through a free fall by the end of the
week
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 and registered only almost 10 calls.
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, it is worth noticing that on Sunday the number of
emergency
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 calls in the
Franch
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French
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 hospital
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Russian
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the Russian
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 hospital was almost the same and recorded 100 and 110 calls per
week
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, respectively.
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, considering the third graph, Russia came
first
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 in the average time
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allocated to diagnose patients before treating them by healthcare workers ( approximately 18-28
minutes
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 ), followed by Japanese medical
institution
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institutions
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 which hit around 16
minutes
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 in the same period.
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, as
it
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presented in the third table graph, the number of
minutes
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that
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spent on assessing urgent medical cases was the same throughout the given period ( 12
minutes
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 per day).
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, emergency, first, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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