The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart demonstrates the distribution of families' weekly
budget
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of areas in 1968 and in 2018. The data is in proportion.
Overall
,
while
the dominating expenditure was food in 1968, it changed to the leisure
category
in 2018.
Additionally
, the least spending was on
fuel
and
power
in 1968 and personal goods
in addition
to the
fuel
and
power
in 2018. In detail, the greatest spending was on the food
category
in 1968 with 40% and it is followed by the categories of housing, clothing and footwear both having 10%. The least consumption belongs to the
category
of
fuel
and
power
with nearly 6%. The food
category
is the only
category
which showed a markable decrease of nearly 17% in 2018.
Moreover
, in 2018, the greatest expenditure was leisure
category
with nearly 23% and
then
followed by housing and transport with nearly 19% and 14%, respectively. The least expenditure was
fuel
and
power
and personal goods with the same proportion which is nearly 4%.
Lastly
, the only
category
that remained steady was household goods. The share of spending did not change between the two years.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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