Some groups, such as poor people or people from rural area find it is difficult to access the university education. Universities should make it especially easy for the students come from the rural areas get an access to the university. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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poor
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should have more support
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and
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higher
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chances so they can get in,
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qulity of life and higher educatian system should help them ,
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they can not afford excelent sources that may help them like wiltheay student form cities can .
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financial
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should get help from higher education
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aspecially
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especially
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high school years becuse thats some how endicated they can do well
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if they got supported well.
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the
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like transportation
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or food skim . another thing as well is that been in low income unable them from
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getting access
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getting
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access
to a high classes
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sources
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so they can not study or prepare for
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members
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variety of books
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strongly
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that student from outside of the capital or the cities
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have more
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consideration
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Make sure your essay directly and completely addresses the task. While you do present a stance, your essay should provide a more detailed discussion on why you believe rural and poor students should be supported in accessing university education. Elaborate on your arguments to fully develop your response.
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Including relevant and specific examples can strengthen your arguments. Try to cite concrete examples or statistics that illustrate the barriers faced by rural and poor students and how universities can assist in overcoming these.

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