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The diagrams below show a structure that is used to generate electricity from wave power. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagrams below show a structure that is used to generate electricity from wave power. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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the two diagrams
represents
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represent
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 the detailed explanation of how electricity
if
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is
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 generated from the
wave
 power. The structure
consist
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 of a
turbine
 connected to the chamber which is located on the cliff or a sea wall. the electricity is obtained by the
air
 which is created by the movement of waves. In the first diagram, The notable part is the
air
 movement. here when the
wave
 hits the chamber it
exert
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air
 into
turbine
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the turbine
a turbine
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.
Then
 the
turbine
roatates
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rotates
on
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in
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clock-wise
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a clock-wise
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 direction and releases the
air
 through
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column
cloumn
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a cloumn
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.
power
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Power
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 is obtained through the rotational movement of a
turbine
 In the second picture, When the
wave
 flows
backward
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then
 the
turbine
 rotates
on
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in
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the anti
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anti
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anti-clock-wise
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clock-wise
 direction. So, simentensly whenever a
wave
 flows through and
flow
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flows
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 backwards the
turbine
 moves in
clock-wise
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clockwise
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 and in
anti
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anti-clock-wise
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clock-wise
 respectively.
In
addition
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addition,
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 the amount of power generated is represented based on the force generated by the waves.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wave, turbine, air, clock-wise with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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