Some groups, such as poor people or people from rural area find it is difficult to access the university education. Universities should make it especially easy for the students come from the rural areas get an access to the university. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
modern
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era, it is believed by many that
students
who come from different rural areas must have
easier
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route leading to
university
campuses
while
others opine that it should be the authority of
university
members to make a track that
are
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accessible for every
students
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student
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.
This
essay will discuss the reasons why
i
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completely agree with
this
statement to start with, perhaps one of the
reason
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reasons
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why most
students
faced
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this
problem is the lack of transport
facility
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.
This
is because, unlike
town
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in town
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areas, most individuals have to walk for longer
period
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periods
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reaching
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for bus station in hopes of going to
university
.
secondly
, the roads which have many bumps and curvy lines
is
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another reason why many
students
might
get
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late for their classes.
moreover
, traffic congestion may
also
contribute
in
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this
category
for instance
,
according to
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Indian
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indian
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an indian
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survey
servey
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survey
almost 47% of adults find it hard to continue their
study
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studies
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due to
lack
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a lack
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of resources
due to
which they have to abandon their
qualification
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qualifications
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of
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studying so,
for
this
reason
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government should
established
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roads that have proper transport facility
as well as
proper maintenance of
route
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the route
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on the other hand
, universities should play
crucial
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role by providing proper means of transportation and resources which are accessible to rural places. they should construct their campuses in between rural and urban
area
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as
to
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both parties have the same travel distances
however
,
this
may not
resolved
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the issue but to some extent might
reduces
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time travelling
for example
, in
japan
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Japan
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people prefer to use
train
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the train
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for going
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to go
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to universities or colleges as it is the easier form of transportation which is cheap and have large open space
thus
, by providing transport and resources may help
students
greatly
to sum up
, individuals especially
university
students
find
hard
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it hard
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to reach on time for their classes I strongly
believed
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that if government and campuses work as a team
this
problem might be solved easily without any hesitation
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