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The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.

The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.
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The bar chart illustrates the field of contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.
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, the industry section increased and became the highest in value as much as
area
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 of agriculture decreased and became lowest over the years, meanwhile
services
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 region fluctuated. From 1960 to 1980 agriculture had the highest benefaction. It went down from just over 60
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percent
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 to a little over
than
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40
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percent
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 and
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 to 31
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 by the year 1990, making it the second highest,
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however
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 in the next 10
years
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 it became the lowest one with being a little above 10
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percent
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. As
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 the industry section, it rose significantly from 1960 to 2000. Even though it had the second lowest contribution in early times it became the highest by the year 1990 after
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 increase, reaching more than 40
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percent
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 and
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 to values of slightly over 60
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 by 2000.
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, the services sector did not change its endowment. It steadily grew from the start till the end and reached more than 20
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at the end
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 with
10
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a 10
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 difference from the start.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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