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The graph below gives historical information and projections about changes in population in the United States, Nigeria and Japan.

The graph below gives historical information and projections about changes in population in the United States, Nigeria and Japan.
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The line graph provides past and future expectations regarding
to
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the human
population
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 in the United States,
Nigeria
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 and Japan.
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,
Nigeria
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 will become
a
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the
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 country with
highest
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the highest
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population
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 in 2050
which
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surpass
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surpassing
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 the United States
while
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 the
population
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 of Japanese
people
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 constantly decline over the period. Units are measured in millions of
people
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. Based on the statistics,
Nigeria
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 had
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population
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a population
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at
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of
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 around 50
million
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 in 1950 and
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 the figure
growing
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grew
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 until
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reached
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 the same level as Japan at 100
million
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 in 2000 . After that,
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Nigeria
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Nigeria's
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population
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to be
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will
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skyrocketed
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 and will reach its highest
population
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 by
year
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the year
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 2050 at approximately 600
million
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people
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.
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, populations in Japan showed a steady period from 1950 to 2050 at
round
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around
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 100
million
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people
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. The United States showed a constant increase between 1950 and 2000,
at
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from
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round
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around
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 200
million
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 in 1950 to 300
million
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 in 2000. The figure will grow
further
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 and reach the highest point by 2050 at around 250
million
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 humans.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, nigeria, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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