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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan
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The graph portrays the statistics of
shops
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 that closed and
shops
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 that opened in a certain country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, from the
graph
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graph,
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it is clear that
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 there was a significant fall in the number of
shops
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 that opened from 2011 to 2018. It is
also
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 imperative to mention that
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the shop
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shop
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shops
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 which closed over the given period witnessed a gradual decrease. To commence with, it is visible that there was a
drammatic
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dramatic
 fall in the number of shop openings from 2011 to 2018 which witnessed
the
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apply
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figures of roughly 8 600 to around 3 000 respectively.
However
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, it is
also
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 important to note the variations which
occured
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occurred
occur
 between 2012 and 2015.
On the other hand
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, the
shops
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 which closed from 2011 to 2018
also
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 registered a slight decrease from an estimate of 6 200 to about 5 800 respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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