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One of your friends recently had a BIRTHDAY celebration, but you missed it and you forgot to tell your friend that you couldn't attend. Write a letter to your friends.In your letter, Apologise for missing the BIRTHDAY celebration. Explain why you missed it and why you didn't tell your friend And sayt what you would like to do to show that you are sorry

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Dear Sally
Hello
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Hello,
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 how are you? I wish to sincerely apologize for missing your BIRTHDAY Please give me a chance to explain and apologise . I had important work. I had to go the America for work
in addition
 to that I lost my phone
that is
 why I can not tell you. But I bought a souvenir for you in America . I hope you like the gift which I bought. I go to yours when I will it give to you.
although
 I will be back on Tuesday. I am really
embarrassment
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 event and request your forgiveness. Please accept
this
 souvenir as a token of my deepest regret for the inconvenience .I am looking forward to your reply Yours sincerely A.hakimova
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Greeting and Closing
Ensure the opening and closing of the letter contain appropriate salutations and valedictions. For a semi-formal or informal letter, like one to a friend, address your friend by first name in the greeting and use a friendly closure.
Logical Structure
Develop a clear logical structure by organising ideas into paragraphs, each with a single main idea. Transition smoothly between ideas and make sure they are connected.
Single Idea per Paragraph
Each paragraph should cover a single topic or idea. For clarity, ensure there is a clear distinction when transitioning from apology, to explanation, to proposing an amends. This aids the reader's understanding.
Complete Response
Fully address all the bullet points given in the prompt. Include an apology, an explanation for both the absence and the lack of communication, and a specific action to make amends.
Suitable Writing Tone
Keep a consistent and appropriate tone throughout the letter. For an apology letter to a friend, maintain a sincere and friendly tone, ensuring your language is also polite and considerate.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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