The diagram below show the change that have taken place ar queen mary hospital since its construction in 1960.
The maps show the developments which took place at Queen Mary Hospital in 1960,1980,2000.
Overall
, a comparison of the three maps reveals a change from a public area to a mainly medical landscape.
In 1960, the shopping center
was built close to a main road and next to a hospital. There was Change the spelling
centre
a
farmland on the left side and behind a shopping Remove the article
apply
center
. Change the spelling
centre
Further
development was the construction of a car
park
on the right side.
By 1980, the farmland knocked
down and replaced by nursing school. Add a missing verb
was knocked
Moreover
, a new industrial estate with cancer
centre and pharmacy which appeared from the demolition of the shopping centre sprang up around the hospital and Correct article usage
a cancer
car
park
.
In 2000, the hospital on the right side remained. The nursing school was cleared to make way for extension
of Add an article
the extension
an extension
cancer
centre. Add an article
the cancer
a cancer
Futhermore
, the Correct your spelling
Furthermore
car
park
had been divided into two buildings in order to make way for a smaller car
park
and small
nursing school.Correct article usage
a small
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