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The three pie charts illustrate how many hours undergraduates, postgraduates and total student population spent in a British university library.

The three pie charts illustrate how many hours undergraduates, postgraduates and total student population spent in a British university library.
The three pie charts illustrate how many
hours
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 undergraduates, postgraduates and
total
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student
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 population spent in a British university library. It
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clearly shows that those
students
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 who are researching for
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postgraduate spent more time in
library
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 than other
students
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 or
either
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undergraduate
students
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.
In
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one
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the one
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 side, just over
the
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one half
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 postgraduates spent at least 15
hours
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 in comparison with
average
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the average
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student
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. The numbers were 51 per
cent
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 and
fifteen
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15
 per
cent
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 respectively.
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, only just under a quarter 17% of
postgraduates
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postgraduate
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students
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 spent between 1 to 7
hours
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 meanwhile
for
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the
all
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average
student
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 in
this
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 class is about 50 per
cent
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.
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, for undergraduates
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student
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student,
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 the chart to be significantly
diffirent
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different
. Most
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student
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students
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who
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spent eight or more
hours
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 37% but out of
this
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 total a modest nine
cent
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 spent fifteen or more, which is almost one of the ten
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the
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corresponding
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 for postgraduate levels.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, student, students, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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