The two maps below show the changes in the town of Denham from 1986 to the present day.

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The two maps

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below

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reveal the alters in

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the town

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of Den

ham

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Ham

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from 1986 to the present day.

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number of buildings were built and expanded. The most noticeable change is that farmland in the east-south of the River Stoke and between a bridge and a primary school

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no more exists.

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, large houses in the gardens were reconstructed into

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retirement

home

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that

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reconstruction was accompanied by

cutting

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down of

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tree

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along the way. 46 new houses have been built since 1986.

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new dwellings were built in the west of the road,

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in the east side only 20 new frames were framed.

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, there are no shops in the present,

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two shops were knocked down and replaced by other things.

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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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3 paragraphs

129 words

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The two maps below show the changes in the town of Denham from 1986 to the present day.

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