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The graph below gives historical information and projections about changes in population in the United States, Nigeria and Japan.

The graph below gives historical information and projections about changes in population in the United States, Nigeria and Japan.
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The line chart illustrates the patterns of historical
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predictions about
population
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 growth in the United
States
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,
Nigeria
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, and
Japan
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. In general,
Nigeria
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 and the United
States
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 have increased year by year from 1950 until 2050.
In contrast
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,
Japan
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 will decrease in
population
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 projections until 2050. Regarding the historical data, we can see that the United
States
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,
Nigeria
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, and
Japan
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 had a starting point were 200
million
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people
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, 50
million
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people
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, and 100
million
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people
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, respectively.
Moreover
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, the United
States
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 have increasing data like linear patterns.
Besides
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 that,
Nigeria
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 has an increasing
population
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 like a polynomial graph.
Moreover
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, All countries almost increased in historical patterns, where
Nigeria
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, the United
States
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, and
Japan
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 had approximately 375
million
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people
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, 200
million
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people
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, and 120
million
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people
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. In terms of projection data, the position starting point and end point have been changing, and
Nigeria
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 have the biggest
population
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 in the future.
Moreover
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,
Nigeria
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 will significantly increase until reaches 600
million
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people
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 .
However
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, the gap value between
Nigeria
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 and
Japan
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 is only half of
Japan
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 but in the future, the gap value between
Japan
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 and
Nigeria
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 will reach 500
million
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people
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 growth.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, states, nigeria, japan, million, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 2 times.
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