The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014
The diagram chart compares 10
countries
in using electricity between production
and consumption
in 2014. The amount of number in billion
kWh
and it represents the production
and consumption
by each country in that year. Overall
, China’s production
and consumption
were higher than those of the other nine countries
, and the country with the lowest production
and consumption
was Korea.
Getting back to the details, around 449 billion
kWh
was consumed and 485 billion
kWh
was produced by Korea, which is the lowest position in production
and consumption
in 2014. At that time, there were 3 countries
whose average production
of electricity was 500 billion
kWH
were
France, Brazil, and Germany. Unnecessary verb
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The
countries
with the highest consumption
of electricity were China, the United States, and Russia, with more than 1000 billion
kWh
. The three countries
known have a large population compared to the other countries
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