The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014
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The diagram chart compares 10
countries
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in using electricity between
production
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and
consumption
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in 2014. The amount of number in
billion
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kWh
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and it represents the
production
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and
consumption
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by each country in that year.
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, China’s
production
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and
consumption
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were higher than those of the other nine
countries
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, and the country with the lowest
production
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and
consumption
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was Korea. Getting back to the details, around 449
billion
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kWh
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was consumed and 485
billion
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kWh
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was produced by Korea, which is the lowest position in
production
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and
consumption
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in 2014. At that time, there were 3
countries
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whose average
production
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of electricity was 500
billion
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kWH
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France, Brazil, and Germany.
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3
countries
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with the highest
consumption
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of electricity were China, the United States, and Russia, with more than 1000
billion
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kWh
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. The three
countries
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known have a large population compared to the other
countries
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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