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task 1: The diagrams below show the present building of a college and the plan for changes to the college site in the future

task 1: The diagrams below show the present building of a college and the plan for changes to the college site in the future
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The map gives information about the college's building in the present time and the change projection towards it in 2020. At a glance, it is noticeable that there will be a lot of change
on
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in
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 the facilities location namely, classroom, reception, library, toilet, and lunch area, whilst the
other
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others
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 will experience the opposite. To embark
on
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apply
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, there is a garden at the top of the map and
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a foothpath
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foothpath
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footpath
 below it, but both of these will be replaced in order to expand the location for
others
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other
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aminities
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amenities
 in the future.
Next,
the parking area
also
 will have
larger
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a larger
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 place. Subsequent to that, they will
built
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build
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 a shop at the top middle of the map with the toilet
at
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on
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 the right side.
Moreover
, the area for lunch will become smaller and will be located between the shop and a classroom.
In addition
, the two classrooms
in
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current
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the current
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 time will be replaced by
library
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a library
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 and the opposite will be transformed into four classrooms.
Then
, the reception will be moved to the middle side, far below the toilet.
Lastly
, the bus stop and road are the facilities that will not experience change in 2020.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Layout
  • Structure
  • Design
  • Facilities
  • Expansion
  • Renovation
  • Development
  • Aesthetics
  • Functionality
  • Enhancement
  • Sustainability
  • Efficiency
  • Adaptability
  • Capacity
  • Optimization
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