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Some people think that robots are important for human future development. Others think that robots have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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There has been a debate about whether
robots
 are
future
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humanity’s
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of humanity’s
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 vital invention, or
they
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whether they
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 bring adverse effects to our society. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both these viewpoints and argue for the second one.
To begin
 with, those who advocate for the first view suggest that
robots
 help assist
our
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with our
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 household chores. They are designed with the aim of doing
works
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work
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such
 as cleaning the window, cooking, etc… which is considerably helpful when we have other more essential work to handle. We can
also
 see that many cutting-edge AI machines nowadays have been introduced mostly for housework purposes, especially when it comes to the robotic vacuum cleaner, one of the most efficient home
robots
, as it helps clean our house automatically within a small amount of time.
This
 allows us to concentrate on more crucial tasks
instead
 of spending time dealing with household chores,
as a result
.
However
, I reckon that
robots
 can detrimentally affect the preservation of electricity, regardless of the benefits. The reason is they play an essential role
on
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in
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 our housework because people tend to do more important tasks rather than doing these, as mentioned previously and that would leave a great attraction to the tech marketing tendency, persuing them to sell more
robots
 making more customers to buy more.
This
 will influence a rise in electricity usage, thereby causing a shortage of it, and I believe that without the existence of
robots
, the world’s electrical resources will be sustained.
To conclude
, though I acknowledge the merit of
robots
is
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in
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 helping with our household chores, it seems to me the drawbacks, reducing electricity sources, are more considerable.
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introduction conclusion
Your essay needs a more fully developed introduction and conclusion. They should be distinct paragraphs that encapsulate the main issues and your final position clearly, while presently they are somewhat brief and lack depth.
logical structure
The essay should be organized into more clear and distinct paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea, further explained and supported by examples.
supported main points
You need to include more precise and relevant examples to support your points. Vague references to 'cutting-edge AI machines' and 'more essential work' need to be expanded with concrete details.
complete response
To fully address the task, you should thoroughly discuss both sides of the argument before providing your own viewpoint. Make sure that each view is equally explored and that your opinion is clear throughout the essay.
clear comprehensive ideas
Ideas presented need to be more comprehensive and developed. The essay loosely refers to potential problems like excessive electricity consumption, but it does not delve into the deeper implications or offer a nuanced discussion.
relevant specific examples
Examples given to support arguments are insufficiently specific. To illustrate your points on the potential negative effects of robots, for example, provide concrete scenarios, data, or case studies where applicable.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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