Fast food is becoming one part of life everywhere; this bad effects on our lifestyle and diet. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays,we have noticed that fast
food
has changed our life
.Fix the agreement mistake
lives
This
has an impact in
our life and dietary habits.I'm in complete agreement that fast Change preposition
on
food
effects
badly on usCorrect your spelling
affects
,since
Rephrase
badly,since
this
is harmful for
Change the preposition
to
health
and it destroys our mental Correct pronoun usage
our health
health
.I will delve deep and discuss more in upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
with,folks do not have time to cook by
their own,because of their work.So,they often purchase junk Change preposition
on
food
to be more energetic in
work.Change preposition
at
However
,it is harmful for
the Change the preposition
to
health
.Eating junk food
regularly will lead to different illnesses,such
as obesity,heart disease and diabetes due to
high
calorie,sugar, and fat content in fast Correct article usage
the high
food
.For instance
,we know that many citizens of America are very fat.As well as
they often order and eat fat-prepared meals.Also
,in America
fast Add a comma
America,
food
companies and restaraunts
have Correct your spelling
restaurants
an
huge popularity among inhabitants.So,they buy fast Correct article usage
a
food
with pleasure.
Secondly
,our mental health
is destroyed by ordering and eating fast food
.Our brain always wants to rest and relax.That's why,tells us signals to just order some meals rather than cook at home.As a result
,in today's society
too many individuals have become Add a comma
society,
so
lazy and sluggish.What's more,some of them are addicted to fast Rephrase
apply
food
.For example
,firstly
people used to order fast food
,
since they did not have time.And Remove the comma
apply
then
,it started slowly to become in
to bad habit.And now, they can't live a day without Change preposition
apply
a fast
Remove the article
fast food
a portion of fast food
food
,they have become excessively fat, their mindset is weak and poor.Also
they have become lazy and inactive.
Add a comma
Also,
To sum up
,as fast food
entered our life
it completely changed people and Fix the agreement mistake
lives
the
way of living.Change the word
their
As a consequence
,a
numerous people struggle with many diseases.Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
In addition
,fast food
has made them weak-minded,lazy and addicted.Submitted by medet.khan774 on
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