Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Over the
last
few decades, whether it is better to acknowledge
worst
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situation or it is important to push ourselves to change that has sparked a debate.
According to
the point of view of some
people
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people,
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it is wise to receive
rough
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a rough
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patch,
such
as dissatisfaction
in
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work or
problem
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of less money, whilst others reckon that it is essential to attempt to enhance their position. In
this
essay, I will look at both sides of the
arguments
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and give my opinion. On one hand, there are several reasons why some people think it is better to stay where they are now, even
they
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if they
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are not happy.
Firstly
, the fear of
loosing
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the
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their
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job if they complain about their position or salary.
For example
, most of the South Asian countries
has
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large
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number of job holders, who are not comfortable with the environment of their office or salary structure. Despite
of
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that
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that,
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they have no intention
to quit
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from
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their company ; because of
increasing
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ratio of unemployment.
Secondly
, the lack of skills, which hold them back to stay in their old position.
For instance
, if a person is a hard worker but still lacks
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, will not take any chance to switch
job
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jobs
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.
On the other hand
, some people think if they
give
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an attempt to promote their
situations
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situation
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, they might have a chance to have
better
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life. An illustration can be made that in business if a man doesn't take any risk to enlarge his
merchandize
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, he will never see the light of success. Another example can be made that if a person doesn't have the courage to talk to his manager to improve his salary, he will never get
better
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wage. In conclusion, I am convinced that if anyone
want
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to be successful he needs to take
risk
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a risk
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or make an attempt for the betterment of his life.
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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