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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The pie charts illustrate the
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proportion of
water
 for various work in six different places of the world.
Overall
,
in
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Africa, Central
Asia
 and South East
Asia
 has the highest percentage of
water
 used for agricultural purpose,
where
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 North
America
 and Europe
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mostly
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it mostly
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in
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 industrial activities. Looking at the pie chart of Africa, Central
Asia
 and South East
Asia
 in more detail it can be seen that most proportion of
water
 used in
agricultural
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the agricultural
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 section at 84%, 88% and 81%, where Central
Asia
 has the highest number of all.
Furthermore
, their usage of
water
 in
domestic
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a domestic
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 category is less than 10% and for industrial it is lower than 13%. Turning to the remaining data
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pie
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the pie
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 charts, North
America
 and Europe,
they
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apply
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used most of the
water
 for
industrial
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the industrial
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purpose
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purposes
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 at 48% and 53%,
where
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 in South
America
 it is only 10%. It is noteworthy that South
America
 has
higher
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 percentage
in
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for
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Agricultural
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agriculture
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 at 71%, in comparison to
that
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North
America
 and Europe
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which have
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 only 39% and 32%.
However
, their usage of
water
in
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for
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 Domestic
purpose
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purposes
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 is close enough at 13%, 19% and 15% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, asia, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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