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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The pie charts illustrate the
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proportion of
water
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 for various work in six different places of the world.
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Africa, Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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 has the highest percentage of
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 used for agricultural purpose,
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 North
America
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 and Europe
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 industrial activities. Looking at the pie chart of Africa, Central
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 and South East
Asia
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 in more detail it can be seen that most proportion of
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agricultural
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the agricultural
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 section at 84%, 88% and 81%, where Central
Asia
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 has the highest number of all.
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 in
domestic
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a domestic
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 category is less than 10% and for industrial it is lower than 13%. Turning to the remaining data
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 charts, North
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 and Europe,
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used most of the
water
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 for
industrial
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the industrial
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purpose
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 at 48% and 53%,
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 in South
America
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 it is only 10%. It is noteworthy that South
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 has
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 percentage
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Agricultural
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 at 71%, in comparison to
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North
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 and Europe
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 only 39% and 32%.
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 Domestic
purpose
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 is close enough at 13%, 19% and 15% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, asia, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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