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You and your friend have both been accepted to a study abroad programme in Paris France

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Dear Anna I hope everything is well with you. I heard that you have been accepted to study in
Paris
. Today I got
letter
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 from
Paris
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the Paris
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university
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University
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 programme. I
write
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am writing
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this
 letter because I have been accepted to
same
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the same
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 university as yours. Congratulation bestie. By the way,do you want to be
roommate
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a roommate
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 with me? If you would like to be
roommate
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a roommate
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 with me it would be amazing. You know, I am
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an introverter
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introverter
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introverted
introvert
 person.
Also
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 we don't have anybody
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with who
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who
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whom
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 we are close. So if we share
same
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the same
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 flat together it would be
cozy
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to
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for
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 us. I am very excited about the things we can do in
Paris
 together. We need to learn
France
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the French
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 language because we live in
Paris
 after all. We can go to see
Eiffel
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the Eiffel
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tower
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Tower
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. If you wish to do something else with me please let me know. Take care Yisil
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coherence cohesion
Ensure clarity in your expressions and intent. The introduction should clearly state the purpose of the letter, and the conclusion should summarize the key points or express a closing thought. Provide coherent linkage between your ideas for better cohesion.
task achievement
Expand on the details of your study abroad programme to fully respond to the task. Include more specific details and examples relevant to the topic such as course details, accommodation plans, or travel schedules for a comprehensive response.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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