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Your friend is planning to move to your city. Advise him to find accommodation

#friend #move #city #accommodation
Dear Linda I am very glad to hear from you
to move
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about moving
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 to our
city
 and you asked me
some
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for some
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 advice
living
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about living
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this
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in this
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 place. I hope
,
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apply
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 the following
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
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 will help you to stay here. First and foremost, you should choose an appropriate accommodation which is near the
city
 centre and full of facilities because If you live in
such
 kind of apartment, it will be convenient for your work or study. I recommend you two or more options to settle down. I will send you all about these buildings and some photos.
Secondly
, there are a number of lively places to visit and chill out. After studying and working hard you want to relax, in that case, these kinds of spots would be
great
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 choice. You don't worry about getting lost around the
city
, you just need a compass and a map of the
city
.
In addition
 to
this
, you can use public transport to her there, like buses or metros because
this
 is a good way. I hope to see you as soon as possible. Yours sincerely, Nelly
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structure
The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion, which are essential for a well-structured letter. Ensure you begin with a proper greeting, a statement of purpose, and end with an appropriate closing statement.
logic
Use clear and logical sequencing of information throughout your letter. Each paragraph should contain a central idea, and sentences should flow logically from one to the next.
content
Expand your main points with specific examples or details to strengthen your advice and provide a more comprehensive response to the task prompt.
tone
Consistently maintain a formal tone appropriate for a letter to a friend asking for advice. Avoid informal expressions and maintain consistent formality throughout.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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