Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary Schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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people believe that in all levels of education, from primary school to

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on learning facts and not enough on learning practical

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of benefits when we

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coherence cohesion

The essay lacks a clear and logical structure. Sentences and paragraphs should be clearly connected with the use of appropriate linking words and phrases. Ideas need to be organized into a coherent argument throughout the essay, with clear distinctions between the introduction, body, and conclusion.

task achievement

The response does not fully address the prompt. To improve, ensure that the introduction clearly states your position and that each paragraph develops a specific main point related to the prompt. Support these points with relevant examples and explain how they relate to the question. Your conclusion should summarize your main points and restate your position clearly.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

199 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

rote memorization
practical skills
adaptable skills
critical thinking
balanced approach
problem-solving
decision-making
workforce readiness
real-life challenges
technological advancements
information management
creativity hindrance
lifelong learning
skill development

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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary Schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Some People prefer to spend their lives doing the same thing and avoiding changes. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

In the past important knowledge and history were stored in the museum. Nowadays information is freely available on the Internet therefore is no longer a need for museums. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, more people are migrating to other countries than ever before. In over to become integrated into society in their adopted countries, immigrants should abandon their old ways and adapt to local customs and codes of behaviors. Do you agree or disagree.

people believe that it is better to build new museums and town halls instead of renovating the old ones. Are you agree or desagree?