Goverments should spend money on railways rather than roads To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
In current time, many various views about means of
transports
can clearly Fix the agreement mistake
transport
seen
. One Change the verb form
be seen
argue
about Replace the word
argument
budget
which Add an article
the budget
useing
by Correct your spelling
using
Correct article usage
the states
states
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states'
state's
transportian
system suggest that states ought to invest in rail line Correct your spelling
transport
instead
of roads. This
argue
has many supporters Replace the word
argument
together
with
I am one of them. In the following Correct word choice
and
parts
I will try to explain why I totally agree Add a comma
parts,
this
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with this
argue
.
Replace the word
argument
To begin
with, world chance
and Correct your spelling
change
techonology
maintain Correct your spelling
technology
its
innovation Correct pronoun usage
their
as well as
secure, benefical
and luxurious transport vehicles Correct your spelling
beneficial
have
Correct pronoun usage
that have
established
for years by engineers.Tracks and roads have similar features. The most important Add a missing verb
been established
same
trait is that both Correct word choice
apply
of
are old and widely used options for a Change preposition
apply
comfort
journey and cargo system. To my mind, Replace the word
comfortable
train
is more useful Add an article
the train
due to
largeness of
transit capacity. Replace the word
the large
Subsequently
, rail
line system seems Correct article usage
the rail
o
Correct your spelling
to
has
shown Wrong verb form
have
environmentalist
. İt does not profit by fuel oil Replace the word
environmentalism
together with
diesel oil . Many years ago trains had
used charcoals so as to Unnecessary verb
apply
carrying
. Those days carbon transformed to air much dirty Change the form of the verb
carry
although
nowadays electric
is Replace the word
electricity
key
provision for railways and it Correct article usage
a key
foreclose
air pollution. It is fresh air and sky that will make Change the verb form
forecloses
this
world more better.
Moreover
, railways is
Change the verb form
are
cheaperv
than roads. To Correct your spelling
cheaper
examplity
, Correct your spelling
exemplify
example
while
I was going to collage
I had several short Correct your spelling
college
holiday
and I visited Change to a plural noun
holidays
to
my aunt who Remove the preposition
apply
live
in a region that Change the verb form
lives
close
to myAdd a missing verb
is close
universty
. It is possible to use Correct your spelling
university
train
and bus Correct article usage
the train
also
. Highway
has no holes , lumps Add an article
The highway
furthermore
it's travel time shorter than train
. Add an article
the train
a train
However
, my choise
was Correct your spelling
choice
train
because I was a student. Fix the infinitive
to train
Besides
my lecture books were expensive soAdd an article
the
train
was best
selection to save money. Change the article
the best
Train
is friendly
live vest for Add an article
the friendly
a friendly
saveing
money.
In conclusion, Correct your spelling
saving
Goverments
must Correct your spelling
governments
gain
railways which conservationist and inexpensive for Verb problem
build
a
pleasure customers.Correct article usage
apply
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