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Band 4.5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, describe the training course you want to do explain what the company could do to help you say how the course will be useful for your job Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Mr. Moeyaert I am Simranpreet Kaur Bhullar, working as a sales associate in the Sales and Marketing Department. I am writing to ask your permission for a training
course
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 in cardiopulmonary resuscitation as
per
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apply
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requested by the HR department.  Let me explain my situation. I am the only person who
is earning
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 in my family, so it would be helpful if
company
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the company
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 could cover all the charges
of
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for
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this
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course
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.
Moreover
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, one of the office
colleague
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 has suggested
me
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I
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to
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apply
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do
this
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course
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 from Brantford, as there is one institute which offers CPR training and assures
to
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me to
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 finish the
course
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 in one day.
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, the price of training is
also
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 reasonable. As per my knowledge, the individual who has the CPR training is leaving the job
this
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 month and there should be someone with cardiopulmonary resuscitation training in the office to deal with an emergency situation.
Apart from
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this
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, if you
are agree
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 with these lessons, please approve my vacation for next Friday, so that I can book the
course
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 in advance. I look forward to
hear
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hearing
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 from
at
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you at
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 the earliest. If you have any concerns, please let me know. Yours faithfully, Simranpreet Kaur Bhullar

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph presents a clear and distinct idea, refrain from merging different requests or explanations within the same paragraph for better clarity.
coherence cohesion
Start the letter with a proper salutation such as 'Dear [Manager's Name],' and always include a sign-off, such as 'Sincerely' or 'Regards,' before your name to maintain professionalism.
task achievement
Make sure to address all parts of the task clearly. The letter should explain the course in greater detail, how exactly it can benefit the job, and present a more compelling case for why the company should support it.
task achievement
Maintain a more formal tone throughout the letter. Avoid using casual language or phrases that may seem too informal for a professional setting.
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