An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries.
Currently,
raising
professionals Verb problem
the number of
number work
in developed countries because they are living Wrong verb form
working
their
own poorer countries. Change preposition
in their
This
essay will examine some of these problems in detail, and Linking Words
then
Linking Words
purpose
some Verb problem
propose
solution
.
One of the biggest problems facing developing countries is few professionals because they get only Fix the agreement mistake
solutions
little
Correct word choice
small
Use synonyms
salary
. It is not enough to live in Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
big
city Correct article usage
a big
nor
in Correct word choice
or
rural
area. Take Add an article
a rural
the rural
teacher
as an example. Teacher, especially in Indonesia, who works in Correct article usage
the teacher
rural
area get Add an article
the rural
Use synonyms
salary
which is not enough for Add an article
a salary
daily
needs. To solve Correct pronoun usage
their daily
this
problem, the government should increase their Linking Words
salary
and prosperity.
Another issue is the country will not develop well. It Use synonyms
because
Add a missing verb
is because
of
the bad infrastructure, especially in rural Change preposition
apply
area
makes them prefer to move to developed Fix the agreement mistake
areas
country
. Fix the agreement mistake
countries
This
cause the human resource will have no Linking Words
progres
. Correct your spelling
progress
This
problem could Linking Words
be address
by Change the verb form
be addressed
improve
the infrastructure and Change the verb form
improving
encourage
them to have nationalism.
Wrong verb form
encouraging
To sum
Linking Words
up
the arguments mentioned above, few professionals can be solved by Add a comma
up,
rise
their Verb problem
raising
Use synonyms
salary
, and the country Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
can
not develop well can be solved by Correct pronoun usage
that can
improve
infrastructure and Wrong verb form
improving
encourage
them to have nationalism.Wrong verb form
encouraging
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