Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and imagination than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

I totally agree with the statement that doing
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the things which
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important role in
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of
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.
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and foremost thing is to work with
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child
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the
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skills
they have
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if
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very good at playing sports
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they are growing up faster than other pupils because physical activities can
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them towards better growth of their body
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their thinking
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also
gradually
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team work
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as well
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they can
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their imagination power by
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some instant decisions for their
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in games.
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remarkable happiness to the
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leads them to develop their
skills
and thinking
process
in order to get better results in that work.
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imagination
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is beneficial to the
child
for future aspects. For
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example if any uncommon situation they face in future
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they can easily defend against that situation by using their
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and deliberation for that problem.
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a child
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is helpful to
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life of
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and
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it
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some good abilities in
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them in future aspects.
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