Some people think that parents should teach their children to be good members of society. However, others believe School is the best place to learn this.

Few individuals believe that
parents
should teach their children to become
a better
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a better member
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members
at
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of
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the
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society
. But, others think
best
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the best
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place
to
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learn
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about
this
is at
the
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apply
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school
.
Although
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notion can be beneficial,
but
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in my opinion
parents
should teach their children to become
a
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apply
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good
citizens
School
is a good
place
to learn how to become
a good
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good members
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members
of a
society
.
Which
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means there are teachers who
knows
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about
the
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society
more than their students, which helps to guide them and helps
to
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them to
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become
to
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better
members
at
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of
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society
.
For example
, In
USA
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the USA
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, a
school
has started teaching about
society
to their students which helps them to become
a good
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good citizens
a good citizen
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citizens
in future.
Thus
,
school
is one of the best
place
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places
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to learn,
to
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and to
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become a good
society
members
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member
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. I
beleve
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believe
parent's
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parents
parent
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should tutor their
kids
to become
a better
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better citizens
a better citizen
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citizens
because
parents
know their
childs
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children
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better than anyone in the world and
also
they know
about
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more about
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their community than any other random people. It means that
,
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parents
know their
children's
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children
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since their birth and they know
ther
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their
every
behaviours
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behaviour
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and
activities
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activity
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.
Also
, they know about
there
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their
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society
more than other people people from different societies like
teacher
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teachers
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and other
members
from different
society
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societies
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.
For instance
, in
uk
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UK
,
parents
started teaching
there
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their
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kid's
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kids
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what
is
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positive and
negitive
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negative
things
of
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about
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their
society
.
Which
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may help
alot
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a lot
to
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kids
to become better
citizens
in
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the comming
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comming
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coming
days.
therefore
,
parentsare
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parents are
better teachers for their sons and daughters to become
a good
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good members
a good member
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members
of the community. In conclusion,
Although
school
can be a good
place
for
kids
to learn and become
a
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apply
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good
society
members
. But, I believe
parents
are the best
tutor's
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tutors
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for
kids
to become
a better
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better citizens
a better citizen
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citizens
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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