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the bar diagram shows Expenditure of two countries france and uk on consumers goods in 2010.

the bar diagram shows Expenditure of two countries france and uk on consumers goods in 2010.
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The chart shows the expenditure of two countries on
consumers
Change the noun form
consumer
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 goods in 2010. The unit of measurement is
Pound
 sterling .
Overall
, both the countries spend huge
amount
Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
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 of
money
for
Change preposition
on
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 cars
while
france
Change the capitalization
France
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 and
Correct article usage
the united
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united
Correct your spelling
United Kingdom
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kingdom
 spend
low
Add an article
the low
a low
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amount
 of
money
in
Change preposition
on
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cameras
 and perfume respectively . As
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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can be seen
that
Correct word choice
apply
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, United
Kingdoms
Fix the agreement mistake
Kingdom
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 spend the
higest
Correct your spelling
highest
amount
 of
money
 i.e 45000
Pound
 sterling
in
Change preposition
on
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 cars
whereas
 ,
in
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on
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cars
Add a comma
cars,
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france
Change the capitalization
France
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 spend only 40000
pound
 sterling . Almost 37000
Pound
 sterling was
spend
Change the form of the verb
spent
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 on computers by
france
Change the capitalization
France
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whereas
United
Correct article usage
the United
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kingdom
Capitalize word
Kingdom
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spends
Wrong verb form
spent
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35000
Add a hyphen
35000-pound
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pound
 sterling .
In addition
 ,
United
Correct article usage
the United
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kingdom
Capitalize word
Kingdom
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spend
Wrong verb form
spent
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second
Correct article usage
the second
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higest
Correct your spelling
highest
amount
 of
money
in
Change preposition
on
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 books i.e 40000
pound
 sterling
while
france
Change the capitalization
France
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spend
Wrong verb form
spent
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ony
Correct your spelling
only
 30000
pound
 sterling .
Secondly
, the lowest
amount
 of
money
spend
Change the form of the verb
spent
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 by both countries
are
Change the verb form
is
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 perfume and
cameras
 . United
kingdoms
Fix the agreement mistake
Kingdom
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 spend less than 15000
pound
 sterling
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
 perfume
while
france
Change the capitalization
France
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 spends 20000
pound
 sterling .
France
 spends
its
Change the word
a
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 lower
amount
 of
money
for
Change preposition
on
show examples
cameras
while
 for
cameras
Correct article usage
the united
show examples
united
Correct your spelling
United Kingdom
show examples
kingdom
 spend more than 30000
pound
 sterling.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pound, amount, money, france, kingdom, cameras with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Expenditure
  • Consumer goods
  • Comparison
  • Significant differences
  • Categories
  • Analyze
  • Notable findings
  • Economic factors
  • Cultural preferences
  • Population size
  • Consumer behavior
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