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You recently read an article in a newspaper about your childhood friend with whom you have lost contact for a long time. Write a letter to the editor. In your letter: - Say which edition and when did the article appear - Explain why you lost contact with your friend - Say how you want them to help you to get back in touch

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My name is Kanwalpreet Kaur, a local resident in your community. I'm requesting you through
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 with my lost friend. Your newspaper is one of the prestigious newspapers in our community, and I always read the articles related to science, technology, and health published every Sunday. Yesterday on 19th Oct, the article mentioned in Edition 'Times New Roman - IV, under the Health care section about 'How to boost the Immune system in Winters?' was written by my friend Alicia Liberty. She is my school-time friend, and Unfortunately, my cell phone was stolen, and I lost all the contact details. I know she is always curious about healthy life and she is doing studies in the same field, so I'm pretty sure that
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please send my details to her with my message to call me soon. My phone no. is 64731110000. I hope that you will send my message and my number to her. Yours Sincerely, Kanwalpreet Kaur.

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task achievement
Ensure that you are stating which edition and when the article appeared more clearly. Provide exact details like '19th October issue of the Times New Roman - IV, Health Care section'.
coherence cohesion
You have provided a logical structure, but you can improve by including a brief introduction of your relationship with your friend to add depth to your letter.
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The tone of your letter is mostly suitable, but be cautious with informal language such as 'pretty sure' which may be seen as too casual for this context.
coherence cohesion
The letter overall flows well, but try to enhance it by adding more cohesive devices and clear paragraphing to denote each aspect of the task.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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