These days, people work in more than one job, and often change career several times during their life. Do advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages?
Nowadays, changing
career
and doing several Fix the agreement mistake
careers
jobs
has become trend
for adults. Add an article
a trend
the trend
This
essay will discuss the merits and demerits of working in more than one
sector and changing field
of Correct article usage
the field
career
.
To start with, there are several benefit
of Change to a plural noun
benefits
jobs
in different field
. First is, more Fix the agreement mistake
fields
jobs
more money
. Humans are eager of
Change preposition
apply
money
for that
whether they earn Correct word choice
apply
Correct pronoun usage
it by
by
Change preposition
through
hardwork
or Correct your spelling
hard work
through
illegal activities. Involving in many Change preposition
apply
jobs
helps to earn a lot of money
and choose their career
field
according to
what they experience
till now.Wrong verb form
have experienced
For instance
, for the
international students to survive they have to Correct article usage
apply
work
and earn themselves so only one
job will not satisfied
their needs so they decide to Change the verb form
satisfy
work
part timer
in many Correct your spelling
time
sector
to pay Change to a plural noun
sectors
fee
for their tuition. Fix the agreement mistake
fees
Secondly
, experience helps to decide the right career
. If people are not well satisfied about
their Change the preposition
with
work
, majority
ofCorrect article usage
the majority
adult
will Fix the agreement mistake
adults
prone
to change Add a missing verb
be prone
the
Correct article usage
apply
jobs
and work
in the field
they like. Engaging in only one
field
will often make bored
. Correct pronoun usage
you bored
For instance
, teacher
who are mainly teaching only Fix the agreement mistake
teachers
one
subject will make them unhappy and may not be able to experience others
Fix the agreement mistake
other fields
field
.
However
, every advantage has its drawbacks too. One
is, changing
Correct word choice
that changing
field
several times will create confusion Correct article usage
the field
to choose
their Change preposition
about choosing
career
. Most of
people are jobless because of their changing Change preposition
apply
habit
of Fix the agreement mistake
habits
jobs
. There is no guarantee of money
they will get nor
the working environment. Correct word choice
or
For instance
, some managers might harash
and give less salary which will only Correct your spelling
harish
harass
harsh
effect
you and Correct your spelling
affect
your
time you spend Change the word
the
to
Change the verb form
working
work
their
. Replace the word
there
Moreover
, there is high
chance of getting blackmailed Add an article
a high
from
strangers or Change preposition
by
new
chief and Correct article usage
a new
have
to change previous Wrong verb form
having
skilled
.
Replace the word
skills
To conclude
, although
changing field
is risky but
experiencing Remove the conjunction
apply
mang
Correct your spelling
a
field
develop career
path rather than listening to others. Correct article usage
a career
Therefore
, I believe working in several jobs
helps to learn many things and grow your skilled manpower.Submitted by kimikobabe1 on
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