You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
It is quite evident that the
government
have modernized immensely over the past few decades due to
the positive influence of modern technology and civilization. However
, I partially agree with the statement and my point of view will be discussed below. On the one
hand, in modern
Add an article
the modern
era
we all are dependent on communication and Add a comma
era,
this
communications
Fix the agreement mistake
communication
made
Add a missing verb
is made
by
many ways. Transportation is Change preposition
in
one
of them. There are lots of ways for transportation such
as,
Airlines, Remove the comma
apply
road
, Fix the agreement mistake
roads
railways
and so on. And our government
provide us those
facilities. I think Add the preposition
with those
government
should spend more money on Add an article
the government
railways
. First and foremost, railways
are better than other transport. For example
, safe journey, fast move, looking outside views and refresh mind and so on. As a
result
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result,
railways
provide more facilities rather than others
. In addition
, there are lots of low class
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low-class
people
in our country they
can not Correct pronoun usage
who
effort
Verb problem
afford
others vehicles
costs but Fix the agreement mistake
other vehicle
railways
give Correct article usage
the railways
this
opportunity for this
Correct determiner usage
these
people
because people
can travel in
Change preposition
by
train
to only buy a ticket it\'s price is very low. That\'s why they prefer railways
rather than roads
. Such
as, family Fix the agreement mistake
trips
trip
, Fix the agreement mistake
trips
long
distance Correct word choice
apply
Fix the agreement mistake
journeys
journey
, office going persons and so on. Aftereffect, Fix the agreement mistake
journeys
people
can feel comfort in railways
not
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, not
others
. On the other hand
, in our everyday life
we can not complete our Add a comma
life,
work
without roads
. Roads
transport Fix the agreement mistake
Road
are
available Correct subject-verb agreement
is
in
any Change preposition
at
time
rather than others
. Train
have a proper schedules for their daily time
. If we can go anywhere for our emergency we can not get trains but roads
are always available for our service. Government
should spend money on Correct article usage
The government
roads
also
because it is important for us. First of all, roads
save our time
and made
our Wrong verb form
make
work
easy. Like, school going
children, emergency patients, urgent Add a hyphen
school-going
work
and so on. Consequently
, we feel comfort
and our Replace the word
comfortable
work
done
properly. Add a missing verb
is done
Afterthat
, Correct your spelling
After that
roads
vehicles Change the noun form
road
are move
Change the verb form
are moving
are moved
one
place to another place very easily. But Change preposition
from one
train
can not do Fix the agreement mistake
trains
this
because train
have Fix the agreement mistake
trains
a
Remove the article
apply
one
specific line for their drive but road
have no limitations. Fix the agreement mistake
roads
For instance
, visit many place
Change to a plural noun
places
in
Change preposition
at
same
Add an article
the same
time
, feel fresh, save time
and so on. As a result
, people
can save their
Correct pronoun usage
apply
time
and we know time
is valuable things for every person. In conclusion, even though, the government
keep minor negative things to the people
, it has enormous value also
. Moreover
, I tend to speculate that the government
should be known to all.Submitted by mariamlima334 on
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task achievement
Ensure that you provide a clear introduction and conclusion which presents your position on the topic. Each paragraph should contain a single main idea, supported by relevant examples or arguments.
coherence cohesion
Organize your writing into clear paragraphs, each with a clear main idea and supporting sentences. Use cohesive devices to help connect ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
task achievement
To improve task achievement, your essay should always respond precisely to the question asked, with a clear position throughout the essay. Avoid deviating from the topic and ensure arguments are relevant.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the logical structure of your argument by planning your essay before writing. Each paragraph should logically follow the other, with clear progression from the introduction to the conclusion.
task achievement
Employ a variety of sentence structures to demonstrate language flexibility and accuracy. Use specific rather than general language, and ensure you include detailed and directly relevant examples to support your points.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion