Table-The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901.

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The table gives information about the total

employees

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and industries that processed silk in two regions in the UK from 1851 to 1901.

Overall

, it can be seen that the number of workers has decreased every year.

On the other hand

, the building facility to produce silk has fluctuated. In terms of the sum of people who work in

this

sector, it has always decreased every 10 years. The proportion of demography by gender

also

appears to have a significant difference. Female dominates the total

workers

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number of workers

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, evidenced by the total amount

that is

much more than male. Over 50 years, the average reduction of employees is 20.000 to 30.000 people. Regarding

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factories, there is

interesting

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phenomenon. From 1851 to 1861, the building has increased dramatically to around 500.

However

start

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from 1871 it

was

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decreased gradually even though the number is about 40 to 60 and has experienced a slight increase.

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Table-The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901.

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