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Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance learning from the Internet rather than teachers in the classroom. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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coherence cohesion
It is crucial to establish a clear and logical structure to your essay. The exam requires a precise introduction, body paragraphs that each contain a single main idea supported by examples or explanations, and a coherent conclusion that summarizes your points. Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly into the next.
coherence cohesion
The introduction lacked a clear thesis statement, and the conclusion was not entirely effective in summarizing the main points of the essay. To improve, the essay should have a clear introduction with a thesis statement that directly addresses the prompt and a conclusion that effectively summarizes the points made.
coherence cohesion
Support your main points with specific examples or evidence. While you mentioned some general considerations in your essay, the argument would be stronger with concrete examples, which helps the reader understand and be persuaded by your points.
task achievement
A complete response to the task is required. While you have expressed an opinion on the subject, the argument is not fully developed, and the task could be addressed in a more direct and comprehensive manner.
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Try to present your ideas more clearly and comprehensively. Usage of incorrect grammar and vocabulary can hinder the reader's understanding. Work on constructing sentences accurately to convey your ideas with clarity.
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While you attempted to use examples in your essay, they need to be more relevant and specific to the topic. Bringing in specific scenarios or data can greatly strengthen your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • unparalleled flexibility
  • democratizes education
  • geographically isolated
  • personal circumstances
  • cost-effectiveness
  • accommodation
  • commuting
  • self-motivated learning
  • self-discipline
  • time management
  • direct interaction
  • feelings of isolation
  • quality and recognition
  • inferior
  • technical issues
  • digital divide
  • reliable technology
  • underprivileged
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