The most important reasons for a young person to attend a university is to increase the amount of money that he or she will earn in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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To commence with, young people should be children
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education
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University
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has large
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take students
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make bright future in
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. There are many opportunities provided. Each
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good study .
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