Now it is possible for tourists to travel into any remote locations Identify advantages and disadvantages of this

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People

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have different views regarding the

possiblity

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possibility

of making

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the journey

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tourists to foreign

countries

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many

insists

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that

tourism

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and

traveling

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travelling

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around the universe

offers

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benefits, I think the minimal benefits they bring pale in comparison to

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the disadvantegeous

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disadvantegeous

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disadvantages

disadvantageous

of probable

habitat

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distruction maked

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destruction made

by stranger visitors.

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tourists and

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tourism

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the tourism

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industry

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thought by some to be

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significant for

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boosting

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the economy

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economy

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situation

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for poorer

countries

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, other

people

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consider it to be detrimental

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environment

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the environment

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. I think travel into remote locations can bring a

nomber

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number

of problems for

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the creatur's

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creatur's

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creature's

creatures

habitat

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and even local

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people;s

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environment. Admittedly, more travel possibility to

ther

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other

their

places

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and locations

gaind

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and

minimal advantages.

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, the development might bring economic merits for

people

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who live in

places

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with lower income.

for example

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, some 3rd world

coutries

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countries

such

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as Africa and some Asian

countries

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which are not able to afford their

expans becaouse

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expenses because

of lack of natural resources or other

resaon

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reason

reasons

torism

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tourism

can provide them

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with an

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opportunity to boost their

economuc

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economic

situations through visitors and

forign

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foreign

passengers.

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ass

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an added

merits

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merit

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poorer

countries

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can

gaine

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gain

a minimum level of progress

cultur

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culture

fron 1st

worl

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world

countries

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by ben

intouch

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in touch

with their

people

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and make a positive collaboration with them.

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, despite the aforementioned

advantageous

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advantages

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. I believe that remote areas could face grave challenges from

increasing

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an increasing

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range of

travelers

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travellers

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. One potentially pressing problem is natural

habitat

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distruction

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destruction

People

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who are

intrested

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interested

in traveling to other

places

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in order to

discovering

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new attractive creatures,

are not care

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do not care

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about the environment

generaly

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generally

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make

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cause

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a disaster injury to

wild life

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wildlife

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and

creatuers

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create

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habitat

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as well.

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major difficulty that

increasing

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the increasing

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rate

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the rate

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tourism

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could

brings

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bring

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, is making air natural resources

pullotion

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pollution

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, passengers

due to

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making a

nomber

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number

tarffic

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traffic

places

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taht

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that

they visiting, produce a

latge

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large

amount of smoke and fog and even a mass of garbages and

abonden

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abandon

them in the

envoiroment

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environment

. In conclusion,

while

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increasing

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apply

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tourism

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possibility

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possibilities

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might present remote locations with minimal

afew

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a few

basic merits, it can

also

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lead to more serious challenges,

inclouding

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including

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natural

resources

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resource

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pollution and

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the distruction

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distruction

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destruction

wild life

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wildlife

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and their

habitat

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Logical Structure

Your essay lacks clear logical structure, and the ideas are not effectively organized. Your introduction and conclusion are present but do not clearly state the essay's main points or effectively summarize the arguments.

Supported Main Points

Main points are mentioned but lack substantiation through supporting details or examples. Consider using more specific examples to clearly articulate the advantages and disadvantages mentioned.

Complete Response

While you have addressed the task of identifying advantages and disadvantages, the ideas are not fully competent in their clarity and the response is not as comprehensive as expected at higher band scores. The relevance of examples and explanation of points is quite surface level and needs to be expanded.

Clear Comprehensive Ideas

While it seems that ideas pertinent to the task are present, they lack the necessary clarity and depth. You should provide clearer and more comprehensive articulations of your thoughts to fully communicate the analysis of advantages and disadvantages.

Relevant Specific Examples

Some references to examples are made but they need to be more specific and directly related to the points being made to effectively illustrate the advantages and disadvantages of tourists traveling to remote locations.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

357 words

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