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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the infromation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the infromation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph gives an overview of changes in the cost of a variety of metals. The picture depicts the percentage
in
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apply
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difference in price among the
year
Use synonyms
 by
months
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month
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. The main trend for all three types of metals remains steady,
however
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, we can see
maximum
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the maximum
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point
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points
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 and minimum
point
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points
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 on the chart. All types of metals show
quiet
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quite
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 similar changing in price during the
year
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: from
march
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March
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 to
may
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May
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, and
than
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then
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 from
july
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July
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 to
october
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October
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. The only difference is at the
bigining
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beginning
 of the
year
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. In
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January
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january
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january,
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nickel
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 appears with
maximum
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a maximum
the maximum
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 point at
6
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a 6
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percentage
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per cent
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 change in the
coast
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cost
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.
On the other hand
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, in the middle of the
year
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,
average
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the average
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 monthly change in prices of
nickel
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significally
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significantly
dropes
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drops
 down to minus three
percentage
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per cent
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. To summarise, the figures show
than
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that
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 there
is
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are
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 no big differences between
nickel
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,
cooper
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copper
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 and
zink
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zinc
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.
Although
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 there are no
dramatical
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dramatic
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 changes in prices during the
year
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,
nickel
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occur
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occurs
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 with maximum and minimum points on the graph.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, nickel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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