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The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040.

#proportion #energy #capacity #gigawatts #gw #predictions
The pie charts provide
comparison
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on
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 the amount of generated
energy
 from four
sources
 that measured in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 and its forecast in 2040. 
Overall
, the amount of produced
energy
 will likely
to
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increase with the fossil fuels usage
is
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still dominating the production,
while
 nuclear and solar will likely to
exchange
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 as the least
sources
 to produce it.  In 2015, 64%
energy
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of energy
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in
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this
 planet
is
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 taken from
the
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fossil fuels, which is predicted to be reduced by 20% in 2040,
while
 the usage of other
sources
rise
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. Some case
also
 happens to other renewables and nuclear
sources
 as their utilisation only take 21% and 5% respectively, with
one
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until
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 two
percent
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 reduction from the quantity in 2015.
In addition
, nuclear happens to be the least
sources
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source
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 that produces
energy
 among others. 
Conversely
,
energy
sources
 like solar and wind
bound
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 to have a flowering growth on their amount of
energy
, which in total dominated one-third
from
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 the total 11.678 GW IN 2040.
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