Some people believe that it is good for children to do chores. Others, however, say that children should not be asked to do household tasks. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that
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early age will be helpful in
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life
,
although
some
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saying
that for
kids
doing a house job will be difficult and it is not a good idea. But to be
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independent
it would be great if we start working
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young age. There are some benefits to
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chores for children. If
kids
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started
tired
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household
work it will be
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helpful
to become self-relevant and live
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their
own lives.
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, if
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parents
give some task by
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said
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children will learn about planning and
time
management skills.
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younger
age
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if
kids
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habituated
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making
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and follow by
time
limit it will be a great help for them in future
life
. Youngsters who are
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willing
to live
successfull
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successful
successfully
life
they have to start chores and
studies
parallelly . On the other
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believers believe that
kids
are not for household
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. If we give them tasks
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they may
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distracted
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from their
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focus
and it may
cause
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bad
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impact
to
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thier
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their
studies
. Like, if
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parents
told
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are told
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to do
dishes
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the dishes
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to
7 year old
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kid,
it
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might accidentally hurt himself
while
washing
knife
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. Adults should focus on
thier
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their
studies
rather than wasting
time
on unimportant
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housework
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. I believe that to live
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prospeous
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prosperous
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it is important to make
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a balance
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between household work and
studies
which
kids
learn from doing chores.
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